Exploiting the visual potential of relationships
I want the viewer to see these diagrams and have a sense of where each member of BROCKHAMPTON contributes to the group. It is a good opportunity to use a diagram because of the way in which some members contribute in multiple realms. A venn diagram allows me to group the members by three possible realms (performers, producers, and operations. A modified system diagram allows me to map the same information in a slightly different way, by using lines to connect each member to their contribution realm(s).
I emulated the same thin lines that my visual language model used, and incorporated the diagonally-shaded zones. I kept details to a minimum and relied on outlines rather than large fills. The graphics are rather abstract, though they could be improved with portraits of each member.
I kept my designs consistent with my color model by using the same dark grey for the text, and by using the red, yellow, and aqua colors form the model but not allowing them to be mixed and touch each other. In one diagram, I used only the red, as the color model uses the same color within some sections. I also incorporated the light grey background.
I used the fonts from my typography model directly. For my large heading, I used the extra bold/black font shown in the title of the model. For my subheadings and larger labels, I used the condensed and thin font of the model's subheadings. For my smallest label text, I used the standard paragraph text of my model.
I designed this display to occupy the top right of my display, as it is not the centerpiece of my infographic and does not feel out of place in a corner.
Critique
Maura Cassidy
With the first image, she saw a clear venn diagram and a big label that told her right away what the topic of the graphic was. The diagram stood out because of the bright coloring, but she found the enclosed words a little difficult to read due to the distracting diagonal line shading. With the second image, she was immediately drawn to the boldly colored circles and enjoyed the more extensive structure of the diagram. It maintained the title clarity that she enjoyed about the first one, and she felt that it also did a good job of displaying the information in an intuitive fashion.
She preferred the second image because the variation in colors felt less stale. She didn't think it sacrificed any relationship intuitiveness of the first image, and felt nicely spaced out with the words placed well in the negative space. She found it more inviting and easier to get through than the first image as well, due to the colors and the sizing of elements.
She felt that the visual language was very consistent with my model, as I avoided color fills and focused on the outlines, and made those outlines resemblant of my model's outlines' strokes and style. She thought my second image more clearly demonstrated my color scheme, but recognized that my model doesn't involve many overlapping colors, so a venn diagram with different colors could be not representative of my color model. She viewed my typography as consistent with my model in both typeface choices and styling of those typefaces. Lastly, she felt that my diagram would fit nicely where I described in my layout diagram.
Response to first critique
Because of this critique, I decided I should opt for a relationship display that incorporates multiple colors and lays out text in clean and easy-to-read positions.
Kari Nasu
In the first image, she saw the venn diagram right away and quickly became focused on the content within it. She was confused by whether the names were broken up by line or whether each line was it's own name, so that was an obstacle and hindrance to readability and usability. Overall, however, she thought it was a clean design that wasn't too distracting and effectively conveyed the relationships at hand. In the second graphic, she found that the varying colors and spaced-out circles made each feel like its own hub, which she thought worked well for the information at hand. The diagram reminded her of graph databases in its layout and node-based design. She felt as though it could be improved by finding some common way to mark each person, as I marked each area with the common symbol of a large, thick circle. She also enjoyed the symmetry of the second diagram.
She preferred the second image because she felt like it was more consistent with my visual language model. The first image incorporates some shading, while my visual language model's shapes didn't have any fill, and were just outlines. She felt that the second diagram maintained the structure of the relationships and was labeled less confusingly than the first.
She described how my models lined up well for the most part, particularly in color and typography. The colors of the second model incorporated all of the colors from my color model and used them in a similar capacity, and the typefaces were the same as my model with the same hierarchy and relative usage. The only model she felt wasn't 100% factored in was my visual language model. She thought this because of the diagonal shading within the venn digram, for my model's shapes do not contain any fill. The diagonal shading in the model is merely used in the negative space to fill some of the background.
Response to second critique
This critique convinced me to use the full names of each member because using simply their first names proved to be confusing, even if it allowed for a slightly simpler and less busy display. I also incorporated her idea of having some sort of common symbol between members by adding a colored underline underneath each member name.
Andrea Chen
The first thing that drew her in the image on the left is the usage of the intersecting circles. She then observed the title that reads "ROLES". The usage of the fill patterned made it hard to read the small text for her, and made it feel too busy to her. The first thing that drew her in on the image on the right was the use of color in the circles. She also noticed the lines that are used to connect the names to the categories.
She preferred the image on the right more, as she thought it made it more easier to read what roles members have since the first and last names were on the same line. She also liked the use of multiple colors since it highlighted different roles.
She noticed how I emulated the model by using the outlines and fill pattern that were used in the visual model. She saw that the fonts are also consistent with the typography model. She thought my color model was also emulated well in the image on the right. She thought I also deviated from the layout model by using diagonal lines to connect the names, as only straight lines were used for that purpose.
Response to third critique
This critique also pushed me to use multiple colors and incorporate diagonal lines in the negative space/background of my display.
This display is a web diagram illustrating how and where the various members of BROCKHAMPTON contribute to the group. Members do everything from producing media to filming video to managing other members to designing the website to performing live on stage, and much more. With this display, I aim to use positional relationships, common colors, and connecting lines to show what contribution area(s) various members are a significant part of.
Revise this text to describe the line styles, textures, level of detail and level of realism you've used in your displays to emulate your visual language model in this revision.
I kept my background color and font color consistent with my color model. Additionally, I incorporated all three non-grayscale colors form my color model into my graphics in a similar capacity to the graphics in my color model.
I used the fonts from my typography model directly. For my large heading, I used the extra bold/black font shown in the title of the model. For my subheadings and larger labels, I used the condensed and thin font of the model's subheadings. For my smallest label text, I used the standard paragraph text of my model.
I designed this display to occupy the top right of my display, as it is not the centerpiece of my infographic and does not feel out of place in a corner.
Critique
Chelsea Le
She saw a web diagram containing three colors. Beyond that, she saw that within the display are many circles with a thick outline, around the circles are many lines connecting to texts, and the circles contain categories, whereas the lines contain names of people. She noticed that the color of the lines corresponds the name to the category of circle, and also saw the title saying "role" showing me that the text do describe people who are members of the Brockhampton. She pointed out that the header text is distinctly thicker than the descriptive text in the relationship diagram. Lastly, she saw diagonal black lines on the upper right side of the design, but was not sure if those have a meaning.
She preferred this design than the previous ones because the line treatment corresponds to the information without you having to read the text because the colors match. The directions of the lines also help bring the content together instead of making it feel like it is all over the place, in her opinion. However, there is a lot of symmetry with the design, which she thought could make the content feel a little dry. She suggested to maybe try to spread the circles out a little more and keep the line colors to make the relationships apparent. She thought there seemed to be a lot of empty space on the sides, and that making the lines spread out would help take up this space.
She thought that visual language model was emulated in the line thickness that was used and usage of circles. She also thought that the colors used in the display also matched the color model very well from the background to yellow, green and orange. One thing I did notice was that there was only one saturation of green (teal) used, while the color model had a few hues of it. To her, the subtext under the header seemed to be bigger in proportion to the header text itself, which strayed from the model. Lastly, she noticed that the color model also had areas of text that that were emphasized in the green teal color, whereas all your text usage in this display was black only.
Kira Nasu
She noticed and liked the diagonal lines adjacent to the title and thought it added some texture and didn't look random. She also liked how the lines underline the names, and found that it especially helps legibility when someone has multiple roles for it relieves the viewer of tracing lines to see where a member sits.
Overall, she preferred the revised version and thought that it was a great improvement since the last time she looked at my display! She thought that I tied in simple yet meaningful details from my color and visual language models to make this an even better fit (ex: the diagonal lines and use of color to underline the member names).
She saw the diagonal lines act as accents in open space in the models, which I emulated in my display, and that colors are directly emulated in this as well. She mentioned that one thing to think about as we begin layout, is a second color for the background since my visual language model has 2 background colors. Looking at my color model, She was not sure if there's one that I can use smoothly, but that'll be a concern for when we start drafting the layout. She could definitely see this display being in the top right corner of your layout. She suggested that although the colored circles look great in her opinion, one thing that could be considered is to give each circle a white outline. She saw this in your visual language model, where the circles are white with dark grey fill to show career percentage stats. Since my visual language model uses a solid white line to separate the photograph from content, this could be used above the header in this display IF it will be right underneath a photo. She also reminded me that in my typography model (which is the same as visual language if I’m correct), there isn't any lowercase text. For this reason, it would be appropriate to make all of my typography capitals and more spaced out. Also, there is one heading in my model ("FORWARD") that is in a dark grey box with white text. Lastly, she said that the heading of "ROLES" in my display could emulate this by being in a dark-colored box.
Rose Jao
The first thing Rose looked at was the bold title and supporting sub-title to understand what the subject was. She was then drawn to the three bold circles and the words inside them. After understanding the categories, she noticed how the lines were color coded to represent what category each person fit in and how they connected with each other. She noted how Kevin Abstract was the only person who had ties to all three categories, which caused her to scan all of the other names to see if there was another person with more than two ties. The relationship display was very easy to understand. As somebody who is not familiar with BROCKHAMPTON’s organizational structure, this was a simple, effective, and quick way to take in the information.
She definitely preferred this updated version compared to either of the originals. The original display on the left felt like it was too simple yet too complex at the same time—the lines in the Venn diagram distracted from the text, yet the text was not big enough to fill the space. The original display on the right was clearer with the categories, but the lines and text felt like it was sprawling. This revised version took the best elements from both; the thin diagonal lines are subtly placed in the upper right corner for artistic effect, and the symmetry between the names and lines creates a much more streamlined and circular visual effect. The color coding adds one more element that helps the reader understand the material faster, which she thinks is a huge addition.
Rose really liked how I incorporated the thin diagonal lines in an artistic way from my visual display model. She noticed how I emulated the rings of color surrounding my text, and how the text is positioned close to the thin lines that connect it to the element it holds a relationship to. Since the visual display model is also the typography model, she thought I did a great job matching the header and sub-header text. However, she thought the text in the model was slightly more bolded than my version, and wonders if there was a way I could incorporate an element where it’s a thin rectangle of color with white text inside. She thought I did a great job incorporating all of the primary colors from my color model. She saw that my model uses more variation in shades for the green, but thought that I should keep my model as it is because there’s no realistic area to incorporate different shades. She fully agrees with my intention to place this display in the upper right corner of my layout model. Since it does not have any photographs or extremely large words, it feels more delicate instead of a focal point.